I just spent a few days in Berlin, which is probably what triggered my entry for the 100 word challenge. I’ll try and make next week’s lighter.
This week’s challenge is to add 100 words to:
….The flame flickered before….
The Last Candle
She opened the door of a kitchen cupboard, bare apart from one solitary candle. Only one by which to remember all those they’d taken. Her father, her mother and her two brothers. Her whole family. What would she do when this one burned out? She struck a match and lit it, fastidiously blowing out the match and throwing it in the bin. Then she sat and watched, seeing the images of those she loved inside the flame. She knew it was only a matter of time.
The single remaining candle turned out to be enough. The flame flickered before they broke down the door.
May 24, 2012 at 11:40 pm
You captured a heart wrenching moment in such a short amount of words. Beautifully painful Excellent job.
May 25, 2012 at 8:10 am
Thank you.
May 25, 2012 at 11:37 am
It had a little fear in the reading. Like what would happen if the candle didn’t last. Very nice … Isadora
my entry : http://insidethemindofisadora.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/the-flame-flickered/
May 25, 2012 at 12:49 pm
Although what actually happened was probably worse. Thanks for commenting
May 25, 2012 at 5:19 pm
I like the word “fastidious”. You don’t see it used that often. This is a great piece of flash fiction, and I really enjoyed it.
May 27, 2012 at 10:14 pm
Thank you
May 27, 2012 at 1:36 am
Oh how well you have built the tension here. I’ll carry this one for a while and that’s an uncomfortable but good thing.
May 27, 2012 at 10:17 pm
It was a strange sort of holiday for me and I’ll carry that for a while.
May 27, 2012 at 4:18 pm
Nicely done. It drew me in and gave me a shock at the end.
May 27, 2012 at 10:20 pm
Thank you!